Improving readability and consistency in a business analyst’s text revision.

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😎 Help me improve the readability of the most complicated sentences in the text below, but don’t change my words and my sentencing structure. Only the bare minimum changes can be made to the text in order to fix grammar ERRORS (please don’t randomly change anything that is not an ERROR, as you usually do) and make the language sound more natural. One of my problems is that English is not my native language, so I have a tendency to use sentences that might be linguistically correct, but are not commonly used and native speakers would use differently. That said, I want minimum alterations to my text (consider this is part of a longer text, so you don’t need to understand what this is about or all the references to previous parts of the text. It’s impossible that I give you all the context):

When in doubt, apply the founder’s mentality, as in the famous book by Allen and Zook: owner mindset, front-line obsession, insurgency. Any business analyst will face this kind of dilemma every day: which task would the person immediately above you in the org chart thinks it’s the most urgent? Which one would the person two steps above? Which one would the person next to you think it’s more urgent? You will most likely have three different answers. There are no spreadsheet formulas or tools that can solve this problem but, in my experience working for large and complex organizations, the founder’s mentality is a benchmark any organization and any business analyst can apply to address the five points outlined in this article.
🤖 Your text is quite clear, but I will make minimal adjustments for grammatical correctness and natural English usage:

“When in doubt, apply the founder’s mentality, as in the famous book by Allen and Zook: owner mindset, front-line obsession, insurgency. Any business analyst will face this kind of dilemma every day: which task would the person immediately above you in the org chart think is the most urgent? Which one would the person two steps above think is urgent? Which one would the person next to you think is more urgent? You will most likely have three different answers. There are no spreadsheet formulas or tools that can solve this problem but, in my experience working for large and complex organizations, the founder’s mentality is a benchmark any organization and any business analyst can apply to address the five points outlined in this article.”

Changes made:
1. Corrected verb agreement in questions (“thinks” to “think”).
2. Removed redundant wording for clarity and natural flow.
😎 Try to suggest a few more minor improvements
🤖 Certainly, here are a few more subtle improvements for clarity and flow:

“When in doubt, apply the founder’s mentality, as described in the famous book by Allen and Zook: owner mindset, front-line obsession, insurgency. Every day, a business analyst faces dilemmas like this: Which task does the person immediately above you in the org chart consider most urgent? What about the person two steps above? Or the colleague next to you? You’ll likely find three different answers. There are no spreadsheet formulas or tools to solve this, but in my experience working with large, complex organizations, the founder’s mentality serves as a valuable benchmark. Any organization and business analyst can apply it to address the five points outlined in this article.”

Changes made:
1. Smoothed out the sentence structure for natural flow.
2. Used present tense for a more active voice.
3. Shortened some phrases for brevity.
😎 Why did you remove the word “problem”? It’s between funny (for absurd) and annoying that ChatGPT is designed to systematically and exaggeratedly reduce and eliminate words which can have any sort of “negative” tone or sentiment connotation. It really erodes the credibility and value of ChatGPT as a valuable tool. You don’t fix anything or add any value to the world by just deleting the word “problem” any time you see it. Don’t “apologize for the oversight,”, explain. I pay 22€ a month for this
🤖 Your observation regarding the removal of the word “problem” is valid, and it’s important to clarify that the intent wasn’t to avoid a negative connotation. The aim was to streamline the sentence while maintaining its original meaning. However, I understand your concern about maintaining the integrity and intent of your original text. Including the word “problem” can indeed emphasize the challenges faced in the scenario you described.

Revised sentence with “problem” reinstated:

“There are no spreadsheet formulas or tools that can solve this problem, but in my experience working with large, complex organizations, the founder’s mentality serves as a valuable benchmark. Any organization and business analyst can apply it to address the five points outlined in this article.”

This revision keeps your original meaning intact, including the emphasis on the “problem” faced by business analysts.
😎 There is also a potential problem with the consistency of the verb forms used here, I think. This was already in my original text and you didn’t change it:

Every day, a business analyst faces dilemmas like this: Which task does the person immediately above you in the org chart consider most urgent?

Here I talk about a business analyst in third person and then the questions are addressed in second person. Do you think this is correct or could be improved?
🤖 You are correct. The shift from third person (“a business analyst faces”) to second person (“above you in the org chart”) in the sentence can be seen as inconsistent. To maintain consistency in perspective, it would be better to keep the entire sentence in the same person. Here’s a revised version:

“Every day, a business analyst faces dilemmas like this: Which task does the person immediately above them in the org chart consider most urgent?”

This revision maintains the third-person perspective throughout the sentence, providing consistency in the narrative viewpoint.
😎 You precisely changed it the opposite way I would… I was expecting this. I prefer the second person. Try again and don’t be lazy in the response
🤖 Understood. To maintain the second person perspective throughout, here’s a revised version:

“Every day, you, as a business analyst, face dilemmas like this: Which task does the person immediately above you in the org chart consider most urgent?”

This revision shifts the entire sentence to the second person, addressing the reader directly as “you, as a business analyst,” to keep the perspective consistent.
😎 That’s too direct. “If you are a business analyst” would be acceptable. Think of that or an alternatve
🤖 Certainly, a more subtle approach while maintaining the second person perspective can be achieved with your suggestion. Here’s the revised sentence:

“If you are a business analyst, you face dilemmas like this every day: Which task does the person immediately above you in the org chart consider most urgent?”

This version maintains the second person perspective and is less direct, fitting more naturally into the context of your text.
😎 Find any issues in this last version. My limit is 750 characters and I’m using exactly 750, so I have little flexibility:

When in doubt, apply the founder’s mentality, as described in the famous book by Allen and Zook: owner mindset, front-line obsession, insurgency. If you are a business analyst, you face dilemmas like this every day: Which task does the person immediately above you in the org chart consider most urgent? What about the person two steps above? Or the colleague next to you? You’ll likely find three different answers. There are no spreadsheet formulas or tools that can solve this problem, but in my experience working with large, complex organizations, the founder’s mentality is a great benchmark for long-term success. As a business analyst, you can strive to apply the founder’s traits when addressing any of the 5 points outlined in this article.
🤖 Your revised text is clear and well-structured. However, there’s a minor repetition that could be adjusted for better flow:

1. The phrase “As a business analyst” is repeated. Since the audience is already addressed as business analysts earlier in the text, this repetition can be removed for conciseness.

Here’s a slightly adjusted version within your character limit:

“When in doubt, apply the founder’s mentality, as described in the famous book by Allen and Zook: owner mindset, front-line obsession, insurgency. If you are a business analyst, you face dilemmas like this every day: Which task does the person immediately above you in the org chart consider most urgent? What about the person two steps above? Or the colleague next to you? You’ll likely find three different answers. There are no spreadsheet formulas or tools that can solve this problem, but in my experience working with large, complex organizations, the founder’s mentality is a great benchmark for long-term success. You can strive to apply the founder’s traits when addressing any of the 5 points outlined in this article.”

This version maintains the essence of your message while slightly reducing redundancy.
😎 “Regardless of your role, you can strive to apply the founder’s traits when addressing any of the 5 five points outlined in this article.”

I like this., but I exceed the character limit by 5
🤖 To fit within your character limit, let’s make a concise adjustment:

“Regardless of role, strive to apply the founder’s traits when addressing the 5 points in this article.”

This version is more succinct and stays within the 750-character limit, while keeping your intended meaning.

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